Wednesday WiPpet: Butting Heads

The trouble with the editing and more editing stage of writing is that new words have a hard time getting written! As such, here’s another look at Evensong, chapter 9 (2 + 7 for the 27th of the month). When you’ve had a read, be sure to check out the other links for this week’s WiPpeteers – found below!

Bit of context – Corey’s heading a scouting mission to watching Evil Guy’s Tower of Evil. Jayden has just discovered that Jeff’s original plan for his novel was to kill his lead character off in a fight and is none too pleased about it, so he rides off to join the scouts and Jeff has the brilliant plan to follow him.

**

Corey nodded. “So why don’t you go home, plan the battle, and then come back here with enough force to knock down the whole building?”

Jayden’s shoulders slumped. “This is rotten, you know that? You getting to be out where the action is while I’m stuck at home to draw pictures and point out strategy. Planning is Jasmine’s scene. I do.”

“Well if you do stay here, you’ll get us all killed, brother. Do us a favour and go home.”

Jeff agreed, happy to discover that World-Corey was a little smarter than Book-Corey.

Swish snorted, and although Jeff ducked behind him, he knew his cover had been blown.

“What is he doing here?”

“Bastard’s trying to kill me,” Jayden stated, without the anger Jeff had begun to associate with reference to himself.

Corey checked to make sure his friend wasn’t joking and then he snorted, his eyes darkening into two deep pools of hate.

“You’re welcome to try, little man.”

Jeff wanted to roll his eyes and say, “Not here,” but felt such an argument wouldn’t do much to ease Jayden’s fury.

**

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14 comments

  1. >>Corey checked to make sure his friend wasn’t joking and then he snorted, his eyes darkening into two deep pools of hate.

    “You’re welcome to try, little man.”<<

    *shiver* Absolutely love this. "You're welcome to try, little man." Oh yeah, bring it on!

    1. Had to do something! haha 27 was a repeat of a prior post and page 270 would have needed 1k to make sense 😉
      These characters made it so easy to banter. Great group of guys.

  2. I really liked the dialogue – great interaction between the characters.

    I like your take on choosing an extract from chapter 9 (2 + 7) for the 27th – I might have to start getting creative like that too!

    1. When I originally wrote the flash story I thought it’d just leave off there, but I had some people comment on it and encourage a full novel that I did! One more editor to send it out to and then out for subs it goes. Eek!
      Thanks so much for reading! I’m glad you enjoyed it 😀

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